Or haven’t stopped the urge to shout?
Never thinking what others think,
But letting the madness over the brink?
Have ever felt, that you are free-
Free to live, to love and be?
Have you never felt the restraints,
Tying you down, holding you back
Burden you till the wills sag,
Till you stifle the screams of pains?
Running away till you are breathless
Away from the demons you can’t face?
No one to lean on, no one to hold to
Ever lonely in the human zoo,
Claustrophobic in a room of people
Walls close in if you’re alone?
Waiting, waiting, always waiting
For the shackles to give away-
With visions blurring, sanity fading
It’s coming- the end of day!
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N.B. There is nothing about me in here. But I was trying to catch the desperation of a trapped mind. Getting into character is one of my better traits. I have shared the first stanza before, this is the full version. Could I get the desperation across?
No one to lean on, no one to hold to
Ever lonely in the human zoo,
Claustrophobic in a room of people
Walls close in if you’re alone?
Awesome!! Feels like a number from a punk rock band.
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Hi Paritosh!
My last poem seemed like a RAP number to a few! And now Rock, that too, punk! 😀
I think I'll stop the overflow of my poetic talents right here! 😛
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Ever lonely in the human zoo,…hmmm good one dear:)…
loved this specially:)..
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its wonderful coz its raw in its composition…every word rings true! luvd it very much on a personal level!
tc! 🙂
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Gosh…I'm so glad I never feel this way 🙂
Nicely written and I'm happy to know it's not about how you feel.
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Hey Sreya
Great piece of poetry.
i always envy these poetic types…lol
There is nothing about me in here
i know….i know….”scientific” Sreya can't be a pessimist.
Getting into character is one of my better traits.
Hmmm…try acting in the woods(Tolly,Bolly,Holly)…lol
Cheers….and i enjoyed your comment.
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Waiting, waiting, always waiting
For the shackles to give away-
With visions blurring, sanity fading
It’s coming- the end of day!
I Loved these lines very much yaar!!
You are an awesome writer!!
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Hey Sreya
Why u call urself “Misfit”??
i find u fitting very well everywhere.
Cheers.
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beautiful piece of verse..
Burden you till the wills sag..
mesmerizing…
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Thanks!!
Yellow Tulip
Maverick
Kasbian Girl (am honoured to have you here)
Shruti (that way with words…awesome huh?! :D)
I am glad you liked the piece.
I'd like no one to be like this.
Thanks for that thought Kasbian Girl.
Maverick: I'd wish for you to change the fact that you relate to this. I'd rather you didn't like it! 😛
Keep smiling people! ^_^
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There have been a few moments when i have felt like this.
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Hey Sreya
i read ur comment.
i am a realist and a practicalist( if there is such a word)….its good to be idealist though.
i was just curious about this “misfit” thing about you.So i asked.
Cheers
NOTE: You can delete this comment too just like you deleted ur previous comment if u like…..also if u dont like any question of mine….feel free to not answer….
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Hey IP
I deleted that comment 'cause I wasn't exactly glad to see it in my own comment box! 😀
There's nothing wrong to be curious (I am professionally curious, after all! :D) and in asking questions (answering them is my passion :P)!!
Don't worry buddy! 🙂 I know u read the comment and I deleted it only after I was sure u wudn't have missed it!
^_^
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Nice poetry.. too good.. You need to sign up to blogadda.. I mean, you need to be their member and they choose the best post among all their members..
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just outta curiosity i am asking you, which other genre u excel in? u r good at poetry, fiction of all kinds, sarcasm (the most difficult of all), commenting nice things on others blog, day-to-day stuff…phew, an all rounder here…
loved this one…
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Aww.. Neha
I am blushing! 😀
I'm glad you like it!
One more genre I didn't do till now, but am good at (if I may say so) is philosophy! 😛
Check out the next post, felt a need to do it! 😛
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And I'm mostly following good blogs … here is the proof, I'm probably going through the best phase of my life … and with all the 'non'-sense of humor, I don't discriminate between silly and non-silly things and usually (read:ALWAYS) laugh!
“With visions blurring, sanity fading”
But this is what made my eyes speak up loud enough and I couldn't hold back really !
P.S. My sense of poetry is a waste 'unlike' you ! 😛
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i always felt like this you know…..but had to supress my emotions lest people would relegate to my insanity and start questioning my rationality
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oh this is so my types… 🙂 my earlier poetry used be this way .:) now somehow i dont write this way..i hate myself..i have forgotten to write as myself…this is good trust me..i am very particular about commenting..if you are good you are good..i say it..if you are bad..i may not say antyhing at all…(but i havent read many other posts..so dont worry about ME THNKING THEY ARE BAD 🙂 )
you are good poet..u must write more…more…we want more…
we want more.. 🙂
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