Staying Back

A Conversation with Self (Indecision?)
“You let them stride forward, let them die
You here to survive or give up in a fight?”
Placatory words or empty threats,
Couldn’t budge him from the resting place.
“There was a duty to be done.”
“Please don’t sing that song,
It had already been sung!
Cowards maybe but they are still alive;
Dead are rejoiced but are unmoving
Remembered today, forgotten the next!”
“It’s a done deal, no going back.”
“Staying where you are will get the medal,
To be adorned over your dead mettle
Handed over to your widow
Nothing but a keepsake for the gone,
And you still want to stay on?”
‘I’d die if I stayed alive when the children cry,
Die of shame of running away,
Die of being a fallen warrior.
I’d rather not breathe knowing what I didn’t
I’d rather be dead knowing I gave my best
Of trying to save mankind, and life!
I will stay back, maybe to die,
But not just with a forgotten honor
Maybe in my last ditch try,
There will be one saved life.”



N.B. People usually don’t understand my poetry, it’s not a problem if you don’t either. πŸ™‚ Love, G.:)

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About Guria

An Artist in Science - I am a Misfit 'cause I choose to be one. "Whenever you find that you are on the side of the majority, it is time to reform" And I am a Maverick, because, I'm... umm... brilliant?
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22 Responses to Staying Back

  1. soin says:

    i think i understood this well enough,but i have been deluded before..free

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  2. Stupendous…….

    generally i dont read poetic (flowery)…

    This one did create the interest from the first line….
    Well crafted and fabricated….
    Good job

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  3. Neha says:

    and you are keeping that stupid pole on facebook? girl, you are off your rockers..you are simply amazing G..

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  4. Maverick says:

    Back to writin awesome poems r we….! πŸ˜‰

    dis one's beautiful….direct, a direct lash at the soul…wonderfully displays the theme of emotions while interplaying with the dilemma dat surrounds da decision!

    And I like da end! wonderful work! πŸ™‚

    havent seen u around in quite some time….as in on my blog commenting nd stuff????

    tc! πŸ™‚

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  5. Samadrita says:

    I loved the ending-indeed the 'one saved life' makes all the difference in the world rather than some medal of honor.
    Beautifully phrased! πŸ™‚

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  6. Karthik says:

    This poem reminded me of Mark Twain's quote: “Twenty years from now you will be more disappointed by the things you didn't do than by the ones you did do. Sail away from the safe harbor. Catch the trade winds in your sails.”
    I'm more of a prose guy, so usually prefer prose to poetry, but this one was beautiful! Very thought provoking indeed. πŸ™‚

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  7. Guria says:

    Hey soin

    You are one person I think who will understand it well enough. πŸ™‚

    Hi Mahesh

    Thanks a lot! What can I say, T try! πŸ˜› πŸ˜€

    Hey Neha-jiii

    There's one thing I do better than you, win bets! Not on poetic abilities though (we both know how good we are)! πŸ˜‰ πŸ˜€

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  8. Guria says:

    Heyy Maverick

    Knew have to have another lame attempt at poetry to get my favourite poet back on MM πŸ˜€
    Thanks a lot and I will be haunting your Revelry soon! πŸ™‚

    Hi Sammy

    Welcome back, dear!! I'm glad you caught the nuances so well, and enjoyed them too! πŸ™‚

    Hiya Karthik

    I'm also a complete prose person but with a fascination towards poetry. I appreciate good poetry maybe 'cause I can't write them well-enough! πŸ˜€
    But you enjoyed it inspite of being a prose person… I must be improving! πŸ˜€
    Thanks!! πŸ™‚

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  9. Gyanban says:

    I plotted your lines around office…and thought they fit well at work…where most of us go through indecision,frustration,some self pity and some rage.

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  10. Harini says:

    I have read it twice and I think I am kinda close to understanding it… Not sure. Its been very long since you posted and your frequency has gone down.

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  11. Raksha Raman says:

    Wow G! I've been reading a lot of posts that echo patriotism at the loudest possible decibel levels(courtesy:R'Day) and Here you are, subtly conveying the message:) Loved it! πŸ™‚

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  12. Guria says:

    sm

    Thanks.

    Gyanban

    i enjoyed your comment a lot. Nice comparison. It could be that, I guess. However, 'one saved life'?? Are there any?? πŸ˜€
    Thanks for your input, your comments are really appreciated! πŸ™‚

    Harini

    Good to see you as always! Yeah, my frequency has gone down due to other committments… And I'm sure you did understand this one! πŸ™‚

    Raksha

    That is one of the nicest thing anyone told me about this piece! πŸ™‚
    Thank you!! πŸ™‚ πŸ™‚

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  13. Wow.. I am speechless!! Such a nice and different thought.. Amazing

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  14. Guria says:

    The West Wind

    Means a lot coming from a someone who is a great poet herself! Thank you! πŸ™‚

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  15. Dhiman says:

    du bar poreo kichu bhujlam na πŸ˜€ only after reading the comments understood a little….but like you said that should not be a problem right πŸ˜‰ … just kidding …. khub bhalo hoyeche poem ta πŸ™‚

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  16. Gyanban says:

    Save lives from getting fired I guess…

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  17. Guria says:

    Gyanban

    Absolutely!! πŸ˜€
    Enjoyed your comment the most!! πŸ™‚

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  18. NesQuarX says:

    Love the new design. I'm a total sucker for Red, Black and White.

    Interesting poem here, loved the grays turning to white.

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  19. Sanz says:

    that was a nice one…i really like the plugins on your blog!

    ~Sanz
    http://sanz360.wordpress.com/

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  20. karan a says:

    I dont know if I understood your view and ideas when you penned this down… but I could feel the urge to fight, to sacrifice, to give away, yet no complain… πŸ˜‰

    It was a nice read!

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